"Unemployment Insurance Benefits"

Alice's essay focuses on unemployment. In the first paragraph she describes how unemployment rates have risen and that there are way to too many people collecting unemployment insurance. She then goes on the describe how unemployment insurance is not good because people start to take advantage of it and it only discourages them from getting a job. Alice's position is that she wishes the government would be more strict with their regulations on the unemployment insurance. Alice goes on with her essay by stating the multiple issues that unemployment insureance brings to the economy and gives some ideas that can help to change unemployment insurance.

The first thing that struck me about alice's essay was that it was very well prepared. It had researched facts and measurements that made sense and supported her argument. She did make really logical points and was able to support her claims with sources and references. However, she repeated words a lot. For example, the word "even" was repeated about four times in the first paragraph and the word "overall" was used twice in the conclusion. I suppose that I would have been able to think of another word of phrase for overall, like "in conclusion" or "according to the research."